Posted by critique me please? on January 9, 2009, 5:52 pm
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Okay, so I haven't done any stealing for, like, almost a year. So, how bad was my first attempt? Be honest with me!
You are surrounded by, waters, sweet Jerusalem.
Waters blue as gemstones,
Both serene and violent, gleaming and wise.
Are you some spirit of the air, little one,
Or a harpy, with wings of thunder –
A child of lightning.
Your statue stands by water too,
And with you
Full fathom five thy father lies.
Be brave, Lion of the Lord.
Bravely, my diligence.
Thou shalt be set free.
The next post shows my explanation.
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