Posted by Wolf. on January 14, 2009, 2:26 am, in reply to "Judges? Sorry for the wait."
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He could still hear the audience singing his name – sometimes, at least, but those days were long gone. He was a rational person; he knew this was the end of the road, that he’d done all he could hope to do. Times were changing. He had a kid to take care of, and his craft didn’t bring in nearly enough money to live on anymore. So there he sat on his front porch that brisk Montana morning, idly wondering what had become of the man who had so inspired him as a child, and the new day dawning brought a wistful smile to his face.
He could still hear the audience singing his name – sometimes, at least, but those days were long gone.
Name reference: Audience was a cult British art rock band that was active from 1969-1972. They reformed for a short run in 2004 but, after the death of their drummer, their fate is unclear. Thus, the days of Audience’s prominence are long gone. Why mention Audience? One of the songs on their first album is named Harlequin.
** Very clever, I like how you incorporate audience into the sentence. I had a thought that it might be fore Harlequin but I wasn’t too sure. Now that I see your explanation it is very clear. Tricky tricky! +3, I think it was a bit too tricky for the inexperienced spy (no offense to them okay?) but it was a good technique people should take into consideration when writing their steals.
He was a rational person; he knew this was the end of the road, that he’d done all he could hope to do. Times were changing. He had a kid to take care of, and his craft didn’t bring in nearly enough money to live on anymore.
Rank reference: This passage is all referring to the term rational agent, from economics, and some of the five things that define a rational agent's decision making process. On its Wikipedia page, it states the following:
The action a rational agent takes depends on:
- The motivation of the agent
- The agent’s past experiences (that he’d done all he could hope to do)
- The agent’s information of its environment (this was the end of the road, times were changing)
- The actions, duties, and obligations available to the agent (he had a kid to take care of)
- The estimated benefits and chances of success of the actions (his craft didn’t bring in nearly enough money to live on anymore)
** Very clear to me. +4
So there he sat on his front porch that brisk Montana morning
Herd reference: The origin of the name Montana, montaña, is Spanish for mountain.
**Herd reference was easy, granted, some people might not know to look up Montana in the form of a different language. However, Montana is a rather mountainous country so I’ll still give you a +4
idly
History reference: Harlequin has no objectives – she is thus idle.
**Very true, perhaps something more could have been mentioned, she did have some history in Ni’Srilan but not a significant amount +2
wondering what had become of the man who had so inspired him as a child
History reference: When Harlequin was born in Solira, Severus appeared and used Transference on her, sharing with her all of his memories and emotions involving the spy class in order to inspire her to follow in her father’s (and his) footsteps. Since then, she has neither spoken to nor seen Severus at all.
** More history, very good, yay for picking up the other two points of this +2
and the new day dawning brought a wistful smile to his face.
Name reference: Another reference to the song Harlequin by Audience. This comes almost word-for-word from the last two lines of the first stanza of the song, “And the new day dawning brought a wistful smile / To the face of the Harlequin”.
Additional information in regards to your references always makes for a good backup plan if you know the other may or may not do the trick in earning enough points. I’ll give you back your +1 for retouching on the subject. Again, I found this incredibly easy so I’m judging on behalf of my own abilities to problem solve this. Feel free to get an alternative judgment if you don’t like this though.
Perfect Sixteen, Pass
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