Posted by THE ELEMENTALS on August 20, 2008, 9:34 am, in reply to "WHY SO GLUM, SWEETY PLUM? JUDGES"
Message modified by administrator JudgeJudy August 21, 2008, 9:37 pm
Yay, good footing and better weather!
CHALLENGER #1
Attack One
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Realism: 4/5 Okay, a 16.1 hand horse careening towards a 16.3 hand horse as fast as possible? Almost super-horse, try to stay away from assuming you can come from behind. –1, Char can easily parry your intention of coming behind. It’s not the most realistic attack but it’s powerful.
Power: 5/5 Ouch!
Timing: 4/5 I’m getting the super-horse (as far as speed goes) vibe. Rearing to this height takes time. (-1)
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CHALLENGER #1
Attack Two
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Realism: 4/5 Horses wouldn’t do this in the wild, but then again we’re the puppets here. Are you following Char, and then turning to attack his knee? (-1)
Power: 4/5 It can cause tremendous damage… or you could miss entirely. (-1)
Timing: 4/5 This seems sort of tight and rushed. (-1)
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CHALLENGER #2
Defense One
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Realism: 2/5 You stood still?…. Why?? It’s always better to be in motion. (-1) A horse would not do this in the wild, ever. (-1) You also just exposed your backside to Zakr’s hooves! (-1) Also, Zakr must be at a slight angle to execute this attack, he wouldn’t just land on top of you. How exactly did Zakr get so far off his mark when you moved into his attack?
Damage: 4/5 Well, this wasn’t an expected area to hit, and from backing up? Horses couldn’t back up that quickly in such a short time. (-1)
Timing: 4/5 Same reason as above.
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CHALLENGER #2
Defense Two
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Realism: 4/5 After the shoulder being maimed, you expect to do this without severe pain? (-1)
Damage: 4/5 Just glancing? Come on, a little more than that. (-1)
Timing: 4/5 Too tight, mate. (-1)
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CHALLENGER #2
Attack One
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Realism: 2/5 Rearing on the hind leg. (-1) Fully extending both legs? Your shoulder muscles aid extending the fore-arm, this would hurt like a b###h. (-1) This is not at all very accurate. (-1) This is going to hurt when you land.
Power: 4/5 There wouldn’t actually be 1100 pounds behind the blow, unless you defied gravity. This could potentially be powerful, or you could miss.. (-1)
Timing: 3/5 Again, too tight. (-1) Zakr wouldn’t still be in the same position he had been in his last attack. (-1)
Creativity Bonus: Okay, no one ever does this. (+1)
CHALLENGER #2
Attack Two
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Realism: 4/5 MUCH more realistic. But really, rearing on the injured hind and striking with the injured shoulder? Not very realistic either. (-1)
Power: 5/5 Ouch!
Timing: 4/5 This is going to take a lot of effort on your part if you plan on hitting your mark, Char is a big horse with some serious injuries. (-1)
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CHALLENGER #1
Defense One
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Realism: 5/5 You really couldn’t do anything. Good point mentioning that the head/neck of a horse does act as a rudder.
Damage: 4/5 Eh, more should be taken here, mention the muscles hurt in the process. (-1)
Timing: 4/5 If you had have said shied, it would have been more plausible, but rearing takes time. (-1)
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CHALLENGER #1
Defense Two
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Realism: 5/5 Flight is a strong instinct, and Zakr could probably boogey away from this.
Damage: 4/5 A little more should be taken, show some weakness! (-1)
Timing: 5/5 Fine.
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OVERALL
Challenger #1
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Total from Above: 52/60
Elemental Score*:
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GRAND TOTAL – 52/60
Challenger #2
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Total from Above: 45/60
Elemental Score*:
Bonus Points**:
Penalties***:
GRAND TOTAL – 45/60
I declare ZAKR to be the winner. As you two are from different territories, I’m assuming this is a captive battle? If so, if there’s an eligible captive in Solira it must now go to Zakr’s territory. If not, it looks like Char is going on vacation. :d
Char, you’re a good writer but try to refrain from backseat posting, so to speak. Your first paragraph wasn’t really even pertinent to the battle/attacks/defense at all. The Judge would be able to pick up (or discard age in this instant) without need for clarification. Also, horses in the wild typically live to be about 12. I had difficulty following your attacks, I would suggest some clarification without quite the amount of fluff. Your posts were very long, some of it relevant and some of it wasn’t. You lost a lot of points, especially in the realism section of your 1st defense and 1st attack, as well as timing. You take damage well, but incorporate it into posts later on.
Zakr, your first post was incredibly short but you managed to fit all the points you needed to address in it. Try to elaborate a little more on how his attacks will effect his adversary, what muscles are hit, etc. I don’t get a sense of immense power from your character. You’re pretty realistic in your attacks, but watch your damage and timing!
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